Senior Portfolio Seminar

CRWR 453 Spring 18

April 12, 2018
by kirven18
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Kollin’s Response to “Sunshine State”

At first I found it strange, but a wonderful addition to the essay, that Ralph for having successfully mated a captive, brown pelican, was featured in the magazine Playboy. It was strange to me that such an organization, the Suncoast Seabird Sanctuary, would be featured in a men’s lifestyle magazine. Then, reading on, I realized the descriptions of the bird were increasingly sexual. Gerard describes the pelican’s “soft breast,” and also further describes the relationship between man and bird. (229) To Gerard, and now also to the reader, Ralph and the brown pelican are the most perfect union. Which leads me also to believe that Gerard is hightlighing this essay’s strangeness.

A man for whom no one is particularly fond, has, and is, traveling the world. It is only when we learn about his divorce a number of pages into the essay that we come, possibly, to sympathize with him. Only after reading further do we come to realize is dimensionality. Through learning about his divorce we also learn about his marriage to Beatrice Busch, the daughter of August A. “Gussie” Busch, the president of the St. Louis Cardinals, Ralph’s attempt to expand the sanctuary, and the sanctuary’s groundskeeper, Chris Walls. (232)

After having met Chris, and after hiring five other paid employees, Ralph is accused of stealing money out the donation boxes. This further complicates the story. Because of Gerard’s tendency to do this–to leave us waiting, sure we’ll find the essay’s next quirk, she develops in her essays a sort of momentum which pushes the reader through.

April 12, 2018
by odonnell18
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Maggy’s Response to “Sunshine State”

As I think we have all decided, Gerard’s strength lies in this style of essay, journalism hybrid. On too many occasions to count, and also evident in “The Mayor of Williams Park,” she lets those she interviews really tell the story. There is a whole peripheral cast of characters around her main character, Ralph, and they allow her access to him. Not in the literal sense, but they have history with the man she is writing about. She cannot create this relationship with him herself, and because of his seemingly unhinged mental state, she cannot rely on him to tell the story of the sanctuary’s rise and fall. She often lets readers into her interview process as well.

In her usual style, Gerard makes quick and concise turns to the “big picture.” She does this seamlessly, and it is something that I admire in her work and try to emulate in my own. One page 231 she begins with a quote from Ralph: “‘If we destroy the environment for the wildlife, we destroy the human race as well.’ In the end, the city turned the plot into a landfill.”

As far a narrative techniques are concerned, Gerard picks descriptive details and dialogue with clear intention to develop the character for the reader. This is most obvious with Ralph (240, 265, 266, 271). She also takes her time to set up scenes visually (241). She even includes some foreshadowing (258). The quality of this essay has a detective novel feel at points as well. This draws the reader through the piece.

I’m also thinking about what JGB said earlier in the semester. That it would be smart to look at the title of this collection as not only the name of the place, but to also see the irony in the name. I think this is very clear on page 277, when she finally gains “access” to the warehouse – which has been described before, repeatedly, as dark.

  1. How do we feel Florida plays into this piece, both thematically and visually?
  2. What is this essay critiquing?
  3. What sympathy, if any, do we have for Ralph, and how does Gerard create that sympathy?
  4. In what ways, if any, is this essay considered “personal,” or would you argue it is almost purely an article?

April 10, 2018
by gullicksen18
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Lydia’s Response to “Sunshine State”

I’ve personally found “Sunshine State” to be the most interesting and engaging essay so far. Maybe that says more about me as a person than the essays themselves but I thought it was a great combination of information, drama, intrigue, personal discussion the matter, investigative reporting, and character. There’s a lot happening in this essay so I didn’t mind the length like I did in some of her other essays. It followed pretty much the same structure, parts of history of some subject combined with her personal experiences, but everything was complicated, interesting, and was filled with interesting characters. Ralph was such an interesting figure with so much going on from his past and his current state and his relationships with other people. There were mysteries involving money and people dodging Gerard. There are birds dying and birds being hoarded. There’s this weird relationship that this man has with birds and his weird complications with his father, Jim, his ex-wives and children. Gerard actually has reactions to what’s going on, something I think she was missing in some of the other stories. There’s humor (like finding homes for the little spideys). Honestly, I just really liked this essay and I think it was because there was a lot happening and lot of characters at play and it made the essay really interesting. The things that are at the heart of this story that is seemingly about a bird sanctuary (like the crazy bird man and his relationships with people and animals and the past) are what make this essay come alive.

I think it also captured another aspect of Florida that has been touched upon in earlier essays but never fully discussed and that is Florida’s wildlife. This is the story about a bird sanctuary and wildlife and birds and preservation are (as I understand it) an important part of Florida itself. She’s talked about consumerism and history and the circus and golf and now she’s discussing nature. It adds a fuller picture to her world and the book as a whole.

April 9, 2018
by thom18
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Emma Thom: “Sister” and “Dottie’s B&B”

I’m amazed by the intricate ways that Strout is able to connect these characters. I had almost forgotten about the sad and lonely Pete Barton from “The Sign” and the angsty Lila Lane from “Windmills” when, suddenly, Pete reappears as the point-of-view character for “Sister” and Lila turns out to be his niece. Pete is introduced to us by Tommy Guptill as a somewhat pathetic character. Tommy feels guilty for him, and he seems consumed by sadness. That sadness is still present in this story, but for most of it, Pete is surrounded by his family, making him seem, for a moment, less alone.

As far as plot is concerned, not much is happening in this story (until the almost-trip to Chicago). Lucy comes to visit Pete, then Vicky shows up, and then they sit and talk. But there’s nothing boring about the information shared between them. In the opening, we see Pete’s paranoia, his nervousness about the arrival of his sister. Lucy seems to have this sort of awe-inspiring effect on most of the characters; while all of them are stuck in Amgash, she has left and made something of herself, and for Pete, this is incredible, almost unthinkable. We already know the house is dirty — he’s hardly cleaned in 17 years (the time that has passed since Lucy’s last visit) — but Pete can’t escape the dust and the dirt as the story continues. He wipes his finger on the wall several times and a streak of dust comes off. Even as the sunlight comes in when Lucy opens the blinds, Pete can only focus on the dirt in the corners of the window. Along with the dust, Pete is unable to escape his childhood. He has stayed in the home he grew up in, one that causes pain and panic attacks for both of his sisters. It seems as though he hasn’t grown up at all. “The rug seemed to holler at him, You are such a dope for buying me” (164). Even his description of Vicky’s appearance seems childish and comical. He has hardly left town, has never had a relationship, and struggles to be intimate and loving even with his own siblings. He loves them, but in the way that a small child might love his guardian.

For most of the collection, I’ve wondered about the mother and the father of the Bartons. In Pete’s dramatic and cathartic moment in “The Sign,” I started to assume it might have been the mother who was most cruel. I’m interested in the way that Strout is able to write about such traumatic events, the way these children were treated like animals, and making them seem completely believable. Fear is repeated in the story — fear at Lucy’s arrival, fear at Vicky’s knock on the door and fear that seems to seep out of the walls of their childhood home.

  1. What do you make of Pete’s line “Vicky, we didn’t turn out so bad, you know.”
  2. Loneliness seems to be at the heart of all of the stories we’ve read. How do you see this present in this story?
  3. How does Pete become a sympathetic character? Do you agree that he seems childish?
  4. In what ways has their mother affected the way the Bartons have developed?
  5. What do you think of the subtlety of the way the Bartons’ trauma is revealed?
  6. What do you think of the way Strout links this story to others? Is it possible the links are too subtle?

A few quick thoughts on “Dottie’s Bed and Breakfast.” There’s much more humor in this story than in the last, but she still experiences the same loneliness as these other characters. She seems to enjoy her job and likes to watch the guests and sort of eavesdrop. Dottie is a very observant woman, but she also knows that at the end of the day she’ll experience that “inescapable whisper of abandonment” because “well, that was part of the business too” (186). We also learn in this story that Charlie Mcauley had wandered into this very bed and breakfast and Dottie had accompanied him in his room, watching him sob or rather “wash out his very soul” (202).

Toward the end of the story when Strout writes “Dottie cleared the dishes. Calmness had come to her quickly and quietly,” I was reminded of the hit-thumb theory. It seems a strange and surprising reaction to Dr. Small’s unpleasant comments.

  1. How do you see ideas of class at work in “Dottie’s B&B?”
  2. Do you think Dottie is a sympathetic character or do you find her actions petty in any way?
  3. I’ve noticed a lot of timid women in Strout’s stories — Patty Nicely, Linda Peterson-Cornell. In terms of a feminist reading, do you think Strout is saying anything about a woman’s ability to speak out? Particularly because her last name is “Small.”
  4. Although we don’t see much of Dr. Small, what do you think about his character?
  5. What do you make of the ending?

April 5, 2018
by kirven18
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Kollin’s response to “I Dream of Zenia with the Bright Red Teeth”

I found the story “I Dream of Zenia with the Bright Red Teeth” most interesting because Charis believes her dog, Ouida, is Zenia reborn into a new, more animal body. Charis thinks only about what Zenia could be: Spanish, a singer, her dog. (157) It’s all very strange–the vampire films, the ex-boyfriend drowned in Lake Ontario– all of it.

I also found it really interesting that this story, while it is about the loss of a friend, is also very much about the after — about the things we tell ourselves after having lost. Charis is struggling with having lost a friend. Even Tony and Roz feel bad for her. (So much so they gift her Ouida, the dog we learn about in the beginning of the story.) They’re concerned, even, about her living in Parkdale — a neighborhood which, according to Tony, is rampant with drug dealers. (163)

I liked the relationship between the three women in the story. Each woman is distinct in her own way. I’m interested, because Atwood is older, if she is writing from her own perspective. This story, as others have mentioned, is far more imaginative than others we’ve read, fantastical even.

 

April 5, 2018
by gullicksen18
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Lydia’s Response to Atwood Stories

“I Dream of Zenia with the Red Teeth” by Margaret Atwood followed along with the themes seen in previous stories. Mortality and the frailty of people is a common thread among all the stories. This story was about three older women and one dead woman.

Like all the other stories in the book so far, this story has a fantastic element to it without actually having a fantastic element. Charis thinks that the spirit of Zenia is in her dog but I don’t think we are led to actually believe that this is true.

It’s amazing how somehow Atwood found a way to make the title of this story end up being very literal. Each title has been very literal and each title has surprised me that it has been very literal.

The character of Billy is never actually present in the story. He’s mentioned a lot and we know he is with Charis but he never shows up in any scenes. It makes sense and creates even more distance between the reader and Billy. Perhaps this helps to keep him from being a complete, Disney-style villain while still certainly being the bad guy of the story.

I think the relationships between the older women are the most compelling part of the story and I love the way that Atwood has captured that. They seem a little bumbling, a little confused at times, very caring, and they all have distinct personality traits that set them apart from one another. They balance each other out in a sense and I thought it was really well done.

 

  1. How do the relationships between the women in the story add to the story itself?
  2. Whose story is it anyway? How did the decision of narrator impact your reading of the story?
  3. I don’t think that the characters really have a true dislike for Zenia. What do you think?
  4. There are a lot of weird details in this story, like the vampire films and the dead chickens and the weird dreams. What do you make of these details? How do they change the story?
  5. Do you think Charis’s conclusions at the end of the story were Atwood’s code for what the story was about?
  6. What about the ending of the story? With the plumber. What do you make of that? And the last line about the dog flirting with him?

 

“The Dead Hand Loves you” was a much longer short story and had a very interesting structure, entering the actual story about the dead hand for a bit as Jack wrote it. Again, it had a weirdly literal title and a fantastic element to it as well. It was also the story of older people who are nearing death. Death has been fairly present in all of Atwood’s stories so far.

The unraveling of this story was really well done. The beginning is confusing but intriguing. We aren’t located anywhere in particular, or with anyone in particular. It didn’t last long enough to get frustrated though, and then we were able to find characters and a sense of what was going on. Something that I appreciate about Atwood’s stories is that the plot keeps changing. In some short stories, and I might be guilty of this, the plot and major conflicts are laid out right in the beginning and the focus is on the characters and emotional turmoil. I like that Atwood has plot twists and things that change in her stories, new information that comes to light. There are deeper aspects to her stories, some more than others, but I think she does point out a lot about emotional conflicts and human tendencies while still having engaging, sometimes wild, plots. Her stories are also very creative and that makes them enjoyable to read.

I noticed some similarities between this story and the first story as well. Both Jack and Constance write books that are looked down upon by the literature world but are both quite successful. They have both gone beyond just writing and moved into the realm of movie deals. They are both thinking of long lost “loves” in the end of their lives that had an influence on their work.

 

  1. Do you see similarities between Constance and Jack? What about the differences between these two stories offers the most insight into the characters?
  2. What do you make of Irena? She’s such an interesting character. Is she a doting girlfriend figure who just wants to care for people? Or did she have control all along?
  3. Why does Atwood have Irena act so outwardly domestic?
  4. Why did Atwood have Irena marry the other two men of the house? What did this change about her character?
  5. Are there any similarities between the hold that Irena has over Jack and the hold that the storage unit woman had over men? Both men at the end of their respective stories have a certain sense of doom about them.
  6. Are there any sympathetic characters in this story? Does it matter?

April 5, 2018
by odonnell18
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Maggy’s Atwood Response

To begin, “I Dream of Zenia With the Bright Red Teeth” reads at the pace of flash-fiction, although it is a little long to be considered that. It is a bizarre story, but not necessarily fantastic. Zenia incarnated in Ouida is only a theory. As the characters are all older women, it allows for much back story to be mentioned. I think this lends to the character development, which must be done quickly in a story of this length. History between the characters allows Atwood to recall characteristics and instances from a broader span of time; therefore, more opportunities to flesh out a character in a compact space.

The point-of-view is omniscient, and uses rhetorical questions interestingly (158). Perhaps I just have never noticed, but it seems odd to have a rhetorical question in the omniscient third-person – it almost gives the narrator a distinct voice separate from the characters. This is not usually Atwood’s style, as the third-person’s voice usually mimics the main point-of-view character, or even the subject the main POV character is talking about  (204).

As for “The Dead Hand Loves You,” it was hard not to read this story without looking for a connection to the first three stories in this collection. Perhaps that is why the editor placed it further back, as to separate it from the linked stories, but I still couldn’t help but wonder if a familiar name would be dropped. Atwood does a good job of intriguing the reader from the beginning – is this a horror story? Did someone sign a contract with the devil? Who are these three people? It’s the mystery element of the story proper, which includes a mystery story that was written by the POV character. It’s not until over ten pages into the story that the contract is explained and it becomes clear who the three people are. Atwood also implements “asides” often, which I feel like contributes to the development of the POV character’s voice (188).

Looking at these stories through a feminist lens, as we have been loosely doing, both end with the women in charge. For “The Dead Hand Loves You,” the misogyny is clear via descriptions throughout the story. Yet, Jack seems to have a moment of self-realization on page 204. I know this is more plot related, as opposed to craft, but I find this trend in Atwood’s stories interesting.

April 5, 2018
by thom18
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Emma Thom: “The Dead Hand Loves You”

In the previous story “I Dream of Zenia with the Bright Red Teeth” I had difficulty determining who was at the center — who was the story really about. I had no such problem in “The Dead Hand Loves You.” This is very clearly a story about Jack Dace, a man who is now in his old age (along with his former roommates Rod, Jaffrey, and Irena) but is looking back on the contract and the novel that changed the course of his life. Jack resembles Victor Frankenstein to some extent, staying up at odd hours with his obsession to finish the novel, and the story he’s writing even seems reminiscent of Shelley’s Frankenstein. Jack himself sort of resembles the undead as well, living alone in the attic going days, even weeks without setting foot outside the house. There’s the obvious allusion in bringing the dead back to life (even in pieces) but Atwood’s story and characters mimic the romantic era in general. Their home is described as Victorian and Jack’s writing embodies many of the characteristics of romanticism: the irrational, the personal, the spontaneous.

I’m interested in Jack’s verbosity (?) as well. Toward the end of the story, Atwood writes “He had a facility with adjectives and adverbs, he was told…” (199). He describes things at length often with hyphenated words like “clanking-radiatored” and “hooker-frequented.” Several paragraphs are made up of single sentences. We are able to see inside his head, the words pouring out onto the page, adding to the mania of his character. This is a relatively long story but the story within the story creates an incredible amount of tension and excitement. Jack’s characters are “funhouse mirrored” images of his roommates and it seems as though he is better able to express his suppressed feelings towards Irena through the severed hand. It is quite literally an extension of himself.

I’m not sure what to make of the ending. The last line is a strange question about the time Jack has left or doesn’t have left. At several moments it seems as though Jack has taken on the anger and the frustration of the hand, plotting the ways in which he might kill his former roommates to take back his share. But he never goes through with any of it and we’re left wondering if, perhaps, Irena is the one who has truly lost her marbles.

March 29, 2018
by kirven18
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Kollin’s Response to “The Mayor of Williams Park”

I found it interesting that in this chapter we meet the essay collection’s first black protagonist: a man called G.W. Rolle who we learn is not only an ordained minister but also helps serve the homeless population. Again, like we’ve seen her do before, Gerard introduces a larger concept: the problem of homelessness in the state of Florida. We soon learn that G.W. Rolle was once homeless himself, on and off the street since he was fourteen. We learn also that G.W. Rolle is a convicted felon and that he had wanted instead to be a lawyer or teacher. This opens the essay up to other larger concepts: mass incarceration in America, the problem of employment after incarceration, the targeting of homeless individuals, and, on a smaller scale, the Pinellas County Jail.

One thing I think Gerard does particularly well is present to us a convicted fellon who also enjoys things like writing, and making stories. I believe she does this in order for the reader to believe in the multi-diminsionality of people: the tendencies to be good, bad, and both at the same time.

 

March 29, 2018
by odonnell18
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Maggy’s “The Mayor of Williams Park” Response

This style of essay from Gerard, i.e., less internal, is where I find her most appealing attributes as a nonfiction writer. As in “Going Diamond,” Gerard is able to communicate bigger societal/political issues via a local story. She takes her time during the set up – painting the opening scene, introducing G.W., and giving some context about the homeless issue in Florida. On 176, she makes it clear to the reader why she is telling this specific story at this specific moment, and then transitions to her broader critique on the prison system in America on page 179. This, perhaps, is the big “why does this matter” of the essay. Many people know that the prison system in America is broken, but they do not understand how the homeless epidemic plays into incarceration. She also alludes to a political scandal, on page 182, when discussing the payment (from the city budget) of Robert Marbut.

The line on page 184, “It occurs to me that Jake might have it all backwards,” is effective in grabbing the readers attention. In a longer essay, this is useful to include when the author is about to explain what they think is a main point in their essay. It’s a sort of, “Hey listen up, you think what Jake said, but here’s why we’ve all been wrong.” She understands this because she has spent time with her homeless subjects.

Gerard never directly quotes herself, and her voice is quite passive in most of this essay. This story of homelessness is not her own tragedy to tell, but she has the responsibility of reporting it. Her voice is a guide, a question-asker, but she is not a prominent character. I find this intentional and effective.

I am not sure what the purpose of the dream sequence is (beginning on page 204). God and religion also seem prominent in this essay in a way that I do not fully understand. That being said, I find this essay one of the more enjoyable ones from this collection, and I admire Gerard for her scope – which is often effortless. In a singular essay, she touches on many social, political, economic, etc. issues in a way that is fluid and understandable.